Thursday, 26 May 2016

Short Story

For this piece of writing I have focussing on my vocabulary and punctuation. I have been learning to: -
  • use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞)
  • use all basic punctuation independently and attempt more complex punctuation (eg semicolons, colons, parentheses) (Year 7/8)

The pieces of my writing that are highlighted green are where I have shown my vocabulary and punctuation goal

The Hunt

“Steph Curry with the pop’ I yelled as Curry sunk a three in his small New York apartment, then it cut to Breaking news as he heard a bang nearby followed by screams
He ran to his window and saw the destruction that is the city. Then he ran down stairs outside to the police department.

I grabbed my gear and bolted into the car and then speed off down the road to Times Square. It was a grid lock on the motorway so hopped out and ran the rest of the way about 4 kilometres.
When I finally got to Times Square there was destruction and chaos everywhere people with cuts down their body people crying, some missing things like arms and legs thousands of people were in shock and in unbelievable pain and all I did for about a minute was stand in shock looking at the destruction and terror.

Then I went and helped with getting people out from under the Rubble and with the crowd control and when I was on the rubble I saw a intact security camera I ran over and took the memory card out then took it back to the makeshift setup with the computer the computers then we spot a person putting a bag down and walking away without it “Hey,wait go back a second, right there” as I point at a man with a bag in his about to put it on the ground. “Put the city in lockdown,the guy who did this could still be here, put his picture all over the city,could you tell me if you get a sighting from the public’ I said.

About one hour later we got a reported sighting of the guy by the statue of liberty I raced over to the  statue of liberty. When i got there I couldn’t see him in the crowd so I went to the outskirts of the crowd and spotted him then I yelled “Hey!” Then he ran and then I yelled “stop”then he ran to one of the boats that was going to the Statue of Liberty and he hoped on after chasing him I called for back up and then I jumped from the dock on to the boat as it was leaving and then we had a fist fight in the middle of the boat. Then we docked and then ran after he punched me in the stomach once I got of the ground I ran after him
then I saw him holding a man by the neck with a gun pointed at him he y lied “stop, don't take another step”. After a 2 minute stalemate I took another step then he shot the man and me in the foot  and dropped his and ran up the Statue of Liberty after groning in pain for about 3 minutes I got up and walked up the stairs.

Once I got to the top saw him sobbing and said sorry and then... he jumped through the day indie in the crown then I heard screams from the bottom of the statue. I went down and then I saw people putting him in body bag then I got badged up and got crouches then went back to the station to a round of applause from everyone there and they started calling me a hero. Three months later I could start helping with the rebuild of the city and after I got awarded a medal for bravery.

Wednesday, 18 May 2016

Cross Country-Excellence

Today The kauri team went down to Halswell domain to do cross country. My race was first up the Year 8's had to run 3 kilometers or 12 laps of the school field, It was a close finish between 5,6,7,8 but I came 5th I was really tired after all that running. Then later on the year 8's had a game to play with the house captains, so I helped set up the game to play then we finished cross country then me and Hannah had to hand out the medals in the medal ceremony Then we went back to school.

I showed leadership by not giving up and kept running the whole time.

The learner quality that I showed was Resilient.

Saturday, 7 May 2016

Helping out around school-merit

At school today i was playing football at morning tea then i saw one year 4 on the ground being
hit by another year 4 and the other people around them were leting him hit him so i came over told
one to go away and then i told the other one to get up and then  I took him and the other kid to the teacher to sort it out.

the leadership skill I used was empathy.


Today at kapahaka we started by sing the school song then we moved on to the Maori version of hallelujah to practice the timing of when we step to the front and when we actually started to sing
then we had another go at the school song witch we needed to practice when we start walking through the girl and things like that.

The leadership quality I used was collaborate.

Wednesday, 4 May 2016



WALT: Find and validate data measures e.g mean, median,mode and range from appropriate displays.

I achieved my goal by getting 90 in my ixl games.

Monday, 2 May 2016

I can describe the structure of a Short Story

I can describe the structure of a Short Story

Something I have learned about the structure of short stories is: It is the same as a novel

After reading some short stories two things I will remember when I write my own short story are that the action needs to come into the story quick and it has to be less than a page long